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Post by Hikari Hioru Sat Oct 25, 2014 12:59 pm

Hikari Hioru

Hikari Hioru:



[Attributes]
Power☆☆☆☆
Agility☆☆☆☆☆
Toughness
Intelligence
Willpower☆☆☆☆

[Basic Information]
Full Name: Hikari Hioru
Alias(es): Ruby
Gender: Female
Age: 17
Birthday: September 24th
Sexuality: Bisexual [why not lolz]

[Characteristics]
Height: 5'4"
Weight: 115 lbs
Hair: Black dyed with Ruby Red Streaks
Eyes: Ruby Red

General Appearance: Hikari Hioru is usually seeing wearing her normal White Combat Dress with Red Trimmings though she does often switch it up with a Black Dress with Red Trimmings from time to time. Often wearing high socks, colored black and often wearing small heeled shoes colored Red and Black. Hikari stands at about the average height of a 17 year old girl, she is slightly physically built due to running around and physically conditioning herself in order to use her spells, her hair is a beautiful pitch black that shines in the sunlight and mixed with a Ruby Red hair dye, just seems make Hikari seem more beautiful.

Personality: You can say that Hikari is actually a very sadistic individual when she's around somebody she seems to lust for, whether alone or with a group of people she will not hesitate to actually bluntly say her feelings towards a specific individual; whether Hikari doesn't like that on the spot or openly wants to be around them as often as possible. There is a slight difference however when Hikari is alone with somebody she likes, enemy or friend, and that is usually acting very clingy towards that person and essentially tries to gain their attention because of how lonely she feels inside.

Aside from the entire flirtatious sadistic personality, Hikari actually is a very nice person when around the people she cares about, however she doesn't actually open up to many others simply due to the fact of her sadistic personality can conflict with what she deeply wants: A lasting lover who understands her past and is willing to actually be there for her no matter what. A lasting fighter, Hikari is very hard-headed when it comes to fighting alone and groups tending not to listen very well to thought out plans, though when Hikari makes her own plans they miraculously work out to favor her and her comrades.



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[Life]
Occupation: Guild Mage

Family: Deceased Mother and Father

Medical Conditions: N/A, though it is rumored among those in Hikari's hometown that she is a Psychopath.

Pets: None
Hometown: Crocus
Secrets:


  • Fear of Spiders
  • Fear of the Dark



History:

[Guild & Magic]
Guild: Shadow Heart

Guild Tattoo: Top of the Right Upper-Forearm, colored Amethyst Purple

Magic: Crystal Make
Caster or Holder: Caster
Description: Crystal Make is a Caster Type Molder Magic that utilizes Crystals rather and a specific element. The user can create a variety of objects out of Crystal to be used for offensive, defensive or miscellaneous purposes. Outside of combat, the user can also change their surroundings using Crystal, such as covering the ground with Crystal. The Crystal also can be used as wound dressing, staunching bleeding and preventing the swelling of an injury. In Hikari's case, the Crystals take form of Ruby's, Sapphires, and Emeralds which essentially give off a majestic appeal to her beauty but rather is the form she decided to shape the Crystal Molding Magic.

As of now, Hikari only focuses on the Static aspect of Crystal Making, meaning that she can create inanimate objects at will, including weapons and affecting the environment around herself.

Strengths: Crystal Make is thankfully resistant to Fire and Ice type Magic Attacks and is capable of essentially breaking many things with practical ease but the degree of the magic's strength solely rests on the users mental and physical capacity to use this magic effectively. Being a versatile type of Molder Magic can make Hikari a formidable opponent as it can fit most situations in combat and prove to be an asset in miscellaneous and combat manners.

Weaknesses: While Crystal make is a formidable Molding Caster Magic, one must understand that even though it is much more resilient against other Elemental Magic attacks such as Fire and Ice, it can break if there is too much pressure being applied to it while attempting to absorb an attack. Imagination is a must to fully utilize this Magic to its fullest extents, and one must understand that Crystal Make is only oh-so durable in physical combat and is usually better suited for Mid to Long Range Combat, because that is where it most excels at.


RP Sample:


Username: Hikari Hioru
Face Claim: Akame [Akame ga Kill!]

Theme Song:
No Pain, No Game [Theme Song]


Last edited by Takashi Hioru on Wed Oct 29, 2014 10:21 am; edited 4 times in total
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Posts : 16
Experience : 12
Primary Magic : Crystal Make
Secondary Magic : N/A
Age : 28

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Post by Maxus Mon Oct 27, 2014 4:43 pm

So, this app as it currently stands is unapprovable.

First, age. The site takes place 2 years after the war. Technically 3 given how the overall site Timeline has gone. She would be born right about now if she was born a few years after the war.

Second, in your personality. When roleplaying this character bear two things in mind. This IS a PG13 site. And not everyone is going to bend over backwards for you if you use a little cleavage. If you want anything more explicit you'll have to take it to PM, or other private channels.

The next, and biggest issue, is your history.

Setting aside the aforementioned age thing, it's okay up until the bandits show up. You have several holes and nothing that really ties your app together.

How did the bandits kill not one but TWO ice make mages that had presumably met working for a guild?

Why do the bandits suddenly grow a conscious and leave her alive?

Why does she decide to hate Fairy Tail despite the bandits apparently specifying they only used to work for that guild?

And how does any of this turn your character from sweet, innocent Sunday school girl into dominatrix?

As a side note, your magic's fine.

Bump when you've edited.
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Post by Hikari Hioru Tue Oct 28, 2014 2:21 pm

Bump please
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Experience : 12
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Secondary Magic : N/A
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Post by Maxus Wed Oct 29, 2014 12:32 am

Your history makes much more sense now, though it could still use work. It is, however, passable as is currently...

Except for this major, glaring issue you failed to fix the first time.

Spoiler:

But as the FIRST SENTENCE in your history you have

Spoiler:

This site takes place A FEW YEARS AFTER the war. So you're literally less than a year old. And somehow think you're 17. Fix.

Also, you don't need the PG13 disclaimers. I was telling you what staff would be looking out for in your threads.
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Post by Nero Yamazaki Wed Oct 29, 2014 9:52 am

Okay then I'll jist get rid of the few years after or something, maybe just put put like idj, years in general after the war. and i'll take off the disclaimers, I took off the sexuak attitude of Hikari regardless so i guess it should be fine now lol. will fix when I get to a computer at the library
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Posts : 18
Experience : 11
Primary Magic : Joker's Magic
Secondary Magic : N/A
Age : 28

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Post by Maxus Thu Oct 30, 2014 10:21 am

Alrighty you look good to go.
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